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Post by FLKMNKY on Jul 1, 2006 3:59:32 GMT -5
Here's a poem (if you call it that). I just went through a bunch of Mudvayne songs and compiled them into a single "motto." Most of the parts are from Mudvayne songs, mainly TEOATTC. There are a few things I added, but very little.
Tell me what You think:
We've overcome,
We are unstoppable,
Hard as nails,
Hook that holds,
We reach down and find the strength of many.
We stand, not crawling;
Not falling.
We refuse to lead this,
Refuse to follow.
We walk between the rain,
We go the narrow path,
We destroy to recreate,
Disassemble to assemble,
Rise!
We've come to save you,
Save you from yourselfs.
Strength to be driven.
I command you to rise.
I don't have a title... I was thinking like " Metal " or... " We are Metal " or something.. ;D It's sorta incomplete with no real direction. Just tell me what you think.
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Post by Mudshadow on Jul 1, 2006 10:12:13 GMT -5
It's cool but like you said, no real direction.
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Post by hvymtlmom on Jul 1, 2006 12:32:53 GMT -5
I like it flkmnky \m/ ;D \m/
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Post by FLKMNKY on Jul 1, 2006 14:56:59 GMT -5
Yea, I'm gonna work on it more  |
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Post by lego9139 on Jul 19, 2006 21:43:13 GMT -5
It's cool but like you said, no real direction. Yep |
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Post by stallan on Jul 20, 2006 12:14:37 GMT -5
I think thats its good, and if you could add a little of your own material it would perfect the whole thing.
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Post by mudvayner on Jul 25, 2006 12:22:43 GMT -5
I agree with Stallan, it would be nice if you add some of your own inspiration to it.  |
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Post by Matt - Eoattc on Aug 9, 2006 9:01:45 GMT -5
Good work man, i like it
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Post by BlutlichKind on Sept 29, 2006 6:18:25 GMT -5
Awesome work . Some parts would look really cool on t-shirts imo  . |
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Post by mudvayne8megan on Mar 1, 2008 4:09:07 GMT -5
Yeah totally agree, shirts with alot of those captions would be mad ass.
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Post by anonymous on Mar 20, 2008 19:02:28 GMT -5
I'm pretty sure you're border lining plagiarism by using their lyrics and saying it's your 'poem', but besides that the 'poem' sucks. I hate poetry in general but I can tell if a poem is decent or well written and this was not. And before anyone says anything about being mean, it's called constructive criticism.
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Post by hvymtlmom on Mar 28, 2008 9:24:23 GMT -5
I'm pretty sure you're border lining plagiarism by using their lyrics and saying it's your 'poem', but besides that the 'poem' sucks. I hate poetry in general but I can tell if a poem is decent or well written and this was not. And before anyone says anything about being mean, it's called constructive criticism. Saying something sucks is not constructive criticism....see the posts above yours for examples of that. It takes a lot of balls to post something written from the heart-it takes none to post what you did. And if your desired effect was to piss off the author of the poem, you're a little too late-he hasn't been on here in months. |
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Post by anonymous on Mar 28, 2008 17:16:43 GMT -5
I'm pretty sure you're border lining plagiarism by using their lyrics and saying it's your 'poem', but besides that the 'poem' sucks. I hate poetry in general but I can tell if a poem is decent or well written and this was not. And before anyone says anything about being mean, it's called constructive criticism. Saying something sucks is not constructive criticism....see the posts above yours for examples of that. It takes a lot of balls to post something written from the heart-it takes none to post what you did. And if your desired effect was to piss off the author of the poem, you're a little too late-he hasn't been on here in months. Saying something sucks is constructive criticism and none of the post above are examples of that. The posts above are sugar coated and offer nothing. It doesn't take balls to write something, plus it was just mudvayne lyrics so he can't really call it his. It was stealing stuff from another person and calling it his, doesn't take balls to do that just stupidity. And I don't care if he hasn't been here in months. I was just saying my thoughts. |
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Post by KHRIS on Apr 8, 2008 17:23:08 GMT -5
Saying something sucks is not constructive criticism....see the posts above yours for examples of that. It takes a lot of balls to post something written from the heart-it takes none to post what you did. And if your desired effect was to piss off the author of the poem, you're a little too late-he hasn't been on here in months. Saying something sucks is constructive criticism and none of the post above are examples of that. The posts above are sugar coated and offer nothing. It doesn't take balls to write something, plus it was just mudvayne lyrics so he can't really call it his. It was stealing stuff from another person and calling it his, doesn't take balls to do that just stupidity. And I don't care if he hasn't been here in months. I was just saying my thoughts. Whoa your like the people from the old MW forum. Then LATES!! to you too like the other guy. A coward like you who talks shit to everyone because you know the person cant do anything doesnt belong on this forum. |
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Post by mudvayne8megan on Sept 16, 2008 7:49:18 GMT -5
Is the fact that his screen name is anonymous so we don't have anything to track or that he can just come and go as he pleases.
I haven't seen him on this site, in many other threads.
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